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In Dreams Obscure

I have felt your call
In dreams obscure
Your distress urgent a heartbeat-beacon
Morse coded tears
Beating out a primal rhythm
Known only to -we-

Bound by boarders impassable
I can only chest-pound
Support / caring / love
From deep within
Down a hall of heart
Unknown earlier
I weep and mourn
The passing past
Losses irreparable
A small candle burns for:
You - me - we

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:iconendofdayz:
~endofdayz Apr 9, 2003   Writer
abolutely breathtaking, but leaves one question...

who's calling you Jay?

or don't you know in this one? is this a mysterious call, or are we meant to know who it may be?

it's so wonderfully thought provoking and lyrical. i'd call it a masterwork sir.

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:iconisky:
this is simply fantastic. wonderful images. the title is perfect - captures those intangible...hmmm, no, more in-expressible - emotions.
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:iconchosenone-:
I'd love to go on and on about this poem but my head is clogging. This is worth a +fav Awsome work.
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:iconjustb:
~justb Oct 5, 2002   Writer
coming back to say I love this and offer my support. You're beautiful
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:icon2mo:
Really a great style, I love this.
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:iconpwca:
how thick & caustic... the dreams we chant but never share!!
i've felt every line, every word to it's purest form

a great wholeness!!
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:iconmattspire:
`MattSpire Jul 4, 2002  Professional Digital Artist
im sorry i havent commented on your new work .... i just keep returning to this one...theres something about it that i cant leave alone. my previous words on it were probably so succinct for that reason. it leaves me there, somewhere, deep within those halls, a labyrinth to me..
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:iconsyncretism:
very powerful...a smooth flow of words that creates a most stirring image...
...of secrets, of the past, of things bittersweet with rememberance
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:iconcyber-crash:
Brilliant...moving...powerful...clever.. .
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:icondoomit:
~doomit Jun 30, 2002  Hobbyist Writer
Everyone saying how wonderful the poem is
I gave it a second read

what is it about?
i'm clueless as to the metaphor's meaning. Or suggestive meaning as it were.

Very confusing

-doomit
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